Today, I am working on rewriting the opening chapter of my story. Many authors say they must go back and rewrite the first chapter because they didn’t know what it needed until it the last chapter was written. The last chapter must be set up in the opening chapter, it must be the inevitable result of what came before it. That’s my case today, and why I am revising the opening of my novel.
I’ve done a previous post on 12 options for opening lines and decided to take my own advice. Here, then, are the 12 openings and I need your help. Which one grabs you and makes you want to know more? Please leave a comment and vote for your favorite; but also tell me WHY it works for you. Thanks!
- It was:
It was a brisk spring morning, the day that Laurel and her Father went to inspect Sloth.
- Viewpoint on life:
Cathedrals take time to build, sometimes decades; and as the walls grow, people come and go, live and die. So it was that Laurel came one day with her Father to inspect Sloth.
Laurel groped for Sloth’s cold cheek and caressed the rough stone.
“Has Sloth survived this bitter winter?”
- From her perch atop a twenty foot ladder, Laurel looked across the rooftops of St. Stephens Cathedral at the graceful lines of the stone building and the gargoyles which capped every gutter.
- Alternate for landscape: The city of Montague lay quiet on this early spring morning, except for a brisk wind romping about amidst the towers and gargoyles of the Cathedral of St. Stephens.
When Laurel turned up missing, her father and the priests of the Cathedral of St. Stephens lit candles in prayer and searched and pleaded with the heavens for news of her, but they didn’t think to look up.
It began on a spring day. . .
Meet Jack or Jill:
Laurel was tiny, like a hummingbird, her Father said.
Let’s meet Joe, My Friend:
If Laurel was a friend to all gargoyles, her Father was the god of the gargoyles, the master creator.
- I am:
I am frozen in time, a girl who cannot move forward or backward.
- Misleading lines:
I hate cathedrals, all that stone surrounding a person is creepy.
- Alternative media:
To: All Priests of the River Province
From: Cardinal Pater
We beseech you, brethren, to be on the lookout for a missing girl, one Laurel Raymond, daughter of Master Raymond, architect of the Cathedral of St. Stephens.
Date: Two weeks after the spring solstice
Where: City of Montague, home of the Cathedral of St. Stephens
From Rejection to Acceptance
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