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		<title>The Best Way to Tell a Story</title>
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<h2>Finding the Best Way to Tell a Story</h2>
<p>First drafts are for finding out what story you are telling. Second and subsequent drafts are for finding the best way to tell that story.</p>
<p>I finished a second draft yesterday and someone asked what I concentrated on in that draft. Basically, refining the story and exploring options for telling it.</p>
<p>Specificially, I worked on these things:<span id="more-2309"></span><br />
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<strong>Facts:</strong> I had several experts in child behavior read the mss and saw that there were several checks on the reality of my situations. I&#8217;m dealing with kids in foster care, so I had to look up state laws, read manuals for foster parents, etc. Then, replot with that in mind.</p>
<p><strong>Plot:</strong> There were major plot holes that needed to be addressed. The climax of a major subplot had to be totally overhauled because of the factual corrections. Smaller plot holes had to be filled.</p>
<p><strong>Transitions:</strong> Often there were abrupt changes from scene to scene, without enough details for the reader to follow when/where/what.</p>
<p><strong>Character:</strong> Motivations were unclear. I added more internal thoughts, backstory, and discussion of events. It&#8217;s a delicate balance to keep the story moving, yet make it clear. This draft, I concentrated on making it clear. If my readers want me to be more delicate on the next draft, I can do that.</p>
<p><strong>Villain:</strong> The villain was too cut and dried and needed some softening.</p>
<p><strong>Voice: </strong>OK, I&#8217;m doing that hard thing of alternating voices. So, I had to make each voice distinctive and stay consistent within each voice. I&#8217;m sure there&#8217;s more to do here with consistency, but this is a good start.</p>
<p><strong>Setting: </strong>There&#8217;s still some work to do on portraying this specific school and community, but it&#8217;s pretty good now.</p>
<p><strong>Clarity: </strong>Above all, I tried to get the story out of my head and onto paper with more exactness and completeness.</p>
<p>So, the first draft blocked in the major elements, this draft refined them. I&#8217;ll need at least one more draft to refine and to add highlights.</p>
<h3>Plan for Third Draft</h3>
<p>Specifically, I want to work on consistent voice, refining the language, clearing up any remaining plot problems, keeping a balance of action and internal motivations, making sure Darcy-the-author stays out of the story and the kids are really kids, cutting about 10,000 words (It&#8217;s about 60,000 right now and I think 50,000 would be better), and keeping the pace taut.</p>
<p>I already want to start on the consistency of the voice, but I think I&#8217;ll try to wait a couple days, so I have fresher eyes. But I won&#8217;t let a lot of time pass, or I&#8217;ll lose momentum, especially with the holidays.</p>
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