My WIP is a draft of a novel that I”m going through and expanding. When I read through the draft it felt like a very long treatment, a long synopsis. Scenes weren’t detailed, emotions were nebulous.

As I do this, there are questions that are helping me revise each scene.

1. What is my character fighting for? I’m trying to pinpoint in each scene what is at stake. For many scenes, it’s something small, just getting another to agree or getting something to eat. But usually, I can dig deeper into the relationship and start to figure out why this is the right scene to dramatize: because something in the relationship is at stake.




2. What is the moment just before? I want some emotional baggage to carry over from scene to scene. If my main character (MC) is angry at the end of the last scene, how will that affect the new events. What questions and emotions linger that could come into play here? Can I escalate or de-escalate the emotions?
3. What is the humor? I’m acutely aware that I have a weak funny bone. Instead, I go more for irony. OK. I’m trying to play up that irony in every situation I can. If you’re naturally funny, you want humor even in the most tragic scene. Why? Because it adds depth when you can make a reader laugh and cry at the same time.
4. What is the importance? Why are these events important to the story? I try to make this clear; I try to raise the stakes; I try to embue every action with a sense of urgency; I try to add passion to the dialogue, letting my characters take sides and argue about something they deeply care about.
5. What is discovered? Surprise–it delights readers. I try not to hold back secrets. Orson Scott Card has said the only thing you withhold from your readers is what happens next. Let the reader in on the character’s hopes, dreams and secrets; but don’t foreshadow too much. Story openings like this are common:
   

   It was to be the strangest day of my life.

   I know you’ll find famous books with similar openings. But they don’t work for me because as a reader, I want to find out events as they happen. I don’t want a character/narrator to filter events for me by declaring the coming events as strange. Instead, I’d rather experience them myself and decide myself. I like surprise. At least in fiction.

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Stealing from Life: You Can’t Make this Up

I was talking to my friend, LFP, and he told me about a funny thing that happened on the way to work.

It started with a retriever. LFP reads electric meters in a rural area, driving a company truck from house to deer camp to trailer to house. Yesterday, a retriever started following the truck, just keeping them company. The roads were clear, but ditches, fields and driveways-in-the-shade still retained some ice from last week’s winter storm.

Retriever PLUS. Driving along, retriever following, LRP drove up to the next house. It was a nice house, with a two-car garage which was open. Chickens roamed freely in and out of the garage, and as you might expect, the retriever bounded after them. Now there was squawking chickens and a barking dog making a ruckus while LFP tried to get the meter read without dying of laughter.



Retriever Plus Chickens Plus. But wait. One of the chickens, trying to dodge the retriever, dashed into the garage. The dog leapt after the chicken and hit a patch of ice and slid, not stopping until he hit a large trash can full of aluminum cans to recycle. Can you hear it? Chickens squawking, dog barking, cans clattering.

Retriever Plus Chickens Plus Clattering Cans Plus. Oh, but it gets better. Now, a man, dressed only in boxer shorts, dashes out of the house. He carries a broom and starts swatting at the dog, protecting his precious chickens. Swat, squawk, bark, clatter.

Retriever Plus Chickens Plus Clattering Cans Plus Boxer Shorts Plus. Oh, yes. The man suddenly hit a path of ice. Off balance from swatting at the poor retriever, who was just having an adventure, the man slid, lost his balance, dropped the broom, windmilled his arms, and flipped neatly, landing on his boxer shorts.

Thump, swat, squawk, bark, clatter. And now laughter. LFP said it was the funniest thing he’d seen in months.

Writers Listen to Life

What does a writer do with something like this? Laugh.
And file it away for reference.

Because my imagination couldn’t come up with something that good. The slapstick humor, the way the scene and event builds — what a great model for a scene in my next novel. Times like this I’m reminded how important it is to listen to real stories about what’s happening around me.

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In Search of Humor: The Classic Running Gag

What I’m currently reading:

Why am I reading this book?

I’m not funny. Ask my kids, I lack any sense of humor. But kids love humor, gags, slapstick, jokes, puns, funny things happening in a story or a novel.

I’m near the end of my WIP novel and while I revise on the last chapters, I’m also going back to do minor revisions on the early chapters. Knowing my weakness, my inability to be spontaneously funny, one thing I’m adding in this revision is small touches of humor via the classic running gag.

Think about the first Pirates of the Caribbean movie and the two comic-relief pirates, especially the one with the false eye. That false eye is a running joke. We laugh at it the first time we see it. But running gags need to make the gag funnier as the story progresses. So, when our heroes load cannons with any available metal, the pirate ends up with a fork stuck into the false eyeball. Funny! When the battle is raging on deck, the pirate’s eye is knocked out and he’s on hands and knees chasing the eyeball through the fighting figures. Incongruous, therefore, funny.

How do you find a running gag or joke for your story. For inspiration, I looked at this website about running gags in novels, movies and TV shows.

A couple examples:

• First, we’ll finish up with the humor in the Pirates:
  

  # Pirates Of The Caribbean: Women seem to have a tendency to slap Jack Sparrow… or pretty much anyone representing him.
  Captain Jack Sparrow

  • Why is the rum always gone?
  • He got away with sea turtles, mate. A pair of them strapped to the bottle.
  • Were they eunuchs?
  • Well, they did have a Nice Hat. A really big one.
  • They also tried to Parley with me.
  • But that doesn’t matter since the Pirate’s Code is more like a guideline than actual rules.

• From the Harry Potter novels, this humorous running gag:
  

  If Professor McGonagall walks onto a scene in Harry Potter, expect her to drop those books in shock or horror at some point.

• From House, M.D.TV show, various running gags:
  

  On House MD, almost every time they begin a diagnosis, someone invariably suggests lupus, House casually comments, “It’s not lupus.” This becomes a Running Gag of “it’s never lupus” that finally culminates in a Lampshade Hanging:
  Foreman: You hid your drug stash in a lupus handbook?!
  House: It’s never lupus.

  • This went on so long that House MD was recognized by a lupus advocacy group for raising awareness of the disease.
  • They went so far as to have a janitor (House had no assistants at the moment) suggest lupus. He only knows about the disease because his grandma has it.

My WIP novel has some serious moments and I knew that humor would help relieve the tense moments. I’ve woven in several humorous running gags and think it’s working to make this a stronger revision, a stronger draft of my novel.

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If you want to write a picture book with humor, you must understand the development of humor in kids. Thanks, Tammi, for asking for something on this topic. If you have requests for a certain topic about picture books, send me an email, or put something in the comments.

Writing Funny Picture Books

Here are typical stages of children’s growth in understanding humor.

1. 0-6 months: Laughter without Humor
   Few, if any picture books for this group include humor.
2. 6-15 months: Laughter at Attachment Figure
   You’d need personalized picture books to evoke humor here, because you need the specific person. This is when the adult reading the book can add humor, though, by playing with the story and reading it with expression and by changing the text, tone of voice, etc.
3. 2-4 years: Misnaming Objects or Actions
   Blue hat green hat Kids deliberately misname an object or action to see what the adult says. For a great example of this, look at Blue Hat, Green Hat by Sandra Boynton. In this delightful book, the turkey consistently is wrong in how he puts on the item of clothing.
4. 3-5 years: Playing with Word Sounds.
   Ever wonder why so many editors emphasize word play for kids? Here’s why. Kids think it’s funny. The Recess Queen by Alexis O’Neill is funny, partly because of the great language. “Kits and Kajammer ‘em.”
5. 5-7 years: Pre-riddle Stage
   Kids understand the form of a riddle, but don’t understand vocabulary enough to understand what is funny and what isn’t. This is the age of almost incoherent knock-knock jokes:
   Knock-knock. Who’s there? Nobody’s home!
6. 6-8 years: Riddles For this stage, all the joke books apply. Kids love to read, hear, and tell jokes of all kinds. They read Amelia Bedelia by Peggy Parish. True humor has started to emerge.

If you want to write a humorous picture book, make sure you are targeting a specific age group and understand what is funny to them.

ACTION POINTS

Read a selection of picture books, looking for humor. Do you think your sense of humor matches a child’s sense of humor? Try to find something humorous in each of the categories listed above.

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